Sunday Snippet-03/24/2013
Sunday snippet time again. Thanks for stopping by — I appreciate & love all your comments! Today’s eight-sentences are part of the Weekend Writing Warriors meme. Check out all the participants by clicking that link.
This week, it’s a bit more from one of my works in progress, the childhood friends to lovers story of Matthias and Caroline. You can find other snippets by clicking here.
In this excerpt, Matthias and Caroline are about to go out for dinner. To catch up after thirteen years apart, or maybe it’s a date, Caroline’s not sure. As a gentleman should, he’s helping her into her coat, and…
“You have very soft skin—just like I always imagined it would be.”
Caroline turned in his arms, sacrificing the touch to see his face. “You thought about how my skin would feel?”
“Remember all the times I was in your bedroom?”
Oh god, this was it. “Every one of them, yes.”
“You had all those bottles of lotion on your dresser. That either meant you had the softest skin in the world or some sort of eczema problem.”
I hope you’ve enjoyed these early snippets. I’ll get back to posting from this one in the future, but starting next week, I’ll be switching to my soon-to-be-released book, BODY OF WORK. I hope you’ll come back to check out the hulking, ginger-haired personal trainer and the petite photographer who both think it’d be best to stay away from each other, but can’t seem to do that.
Have an awesome day! 🙂
24 Comments
Sandra Lindsey
Love the last sentence in this extract – it turns the previous conversation from being slightly cheesy towards banter 🙂
S. J. Maylee
Such a sweet scene, so tender, and then he has to mention eczema. I’m giggling over here. 🙂
Donna Cummings
LOL — I love how you sneak humor in. Your heroes are always the best. 🙂
A.S. Fenichel
LOL. That was funny! Great snippet. I love him. LOLOLOL
Eleri Stone
Sweet, funny and sexy- you manage to combine those so well.
Joanne Stewart
hahaha. Love that last line. Very sweet snippet.
Veronica Scott
I love how this conversation is going along so promisingly and then he has to be a guy and mention the eczema thing LOL! Terrific snippet. It definitely feels as if they’ve known each other forever, you really capture the tone.
Elaine
I loved how you built the tension and defused it with humour that made – even in this small snippet – your characters so human and three dimensional.
Jenna Jaxon
LOL! Love the honesty of the last sentence. I had to chuckle. He sounds like a keeper. Great 8!
Summer Ross
That last line is funny. I also liked the idea that she ‘sacrificed’ a touch to look. well done.
~Summer
My 8
Siobhan Muir
Everything so sweet and tender and bam! Eczema. LOL Nicely done, Karla. 🙂
Debbie
LOL He definitely spoiled the mood with that last line. Good one! 🙂
Isabella Leigh
Oh dear. From sweetness and sexual tension to eczema with one ill-thought line. Does she slug him for that one? LOL
Clare Davidson
Oops! His dialogue was all “smooth” until the last line – loved it! I can’t wait to see her reaction to his glib comment 🙂
Kate Warren
ROFL! I was all prepared for that now or never moment of truth, and then that last line hit me. Too funny!
Cynthia Hudson
Sexy and funny ~ always a fantastic combo in my book! Terrific 8!
Danielle Forrest
Oh, I like it. Makes me laugh and wonder what her response will be. Will she be pleased by his compliments or pissed off on the eczema comment?
brendaashworthbarry
Love that last line. ROFL.. What a wonderful snippet. Loved it and want to know more. 🙂
Vivien Dean
Fantastic last line. It’s dialogue like that that gives your prose such a realistic feel to it. Well done!
Melissa MacKinnon
That last line made me chuckle. Good snippet!
Goran Zidar
His reply made me laugh. Fantastic and so completely unexpected.
Cara Bristol
Love your humor as always!
ED Martin
What a great way to keep her guessing as to whether this is a date or just a dinner between friends. Good snippet!
Sarah Ballance
OMG. You totally had me there. I laughed out loud for real! Wonderful humor, woman. You rock!