Sunday Snippet-03/10/2013
Welcome! Today’s eight-sentence snippet is part of the Weekend Writing Warriors meme. Click that link for a complete list of participants.
I’m continuing with a bit from my current WIP. Childhood friends Matthias and Caroline (who both harbored deep crushes but never declared their feelings) are meeting for the first time in thirteen years. Matthias has a lot on his mind.
Matty — nobody else called him that. Not ever. The affection in her voice sliced at his resolve to keep her at arm’s length. Memories of the other times she’d used the nickname floated to the surface. Always innocently, but so damn sweetly. Had things gone differently back then, she wouldn’t be waiting tables in this shithole today. She’d be living like a queen. His queen.
That’s it for now. Have a great day, and thanks for stopping by. 🙂
11 Comments
A.S. Fenichel
I’m liking it. He’s a keeper. Great snippet. Can’t wait for the finished book. 😉
Clare Davidson
He sounds guilty about how things turned out for her. I like the conflict in his thoughts and how much it shows about his past and present feelings for her.
Linda Morris
Sweet and poignant. I love reunion romance. Hopefully he’ll have a second chance to help her live like a queen.
Veronica Scott
I really want to read this all at once, am enjoying the story so much! Excellent excerpt as always!
Jenna Jaxon
He’s a sweetie. Love the way he wishes things had been different. Perhaps she’ll still end up his queen eventually.:) Nice 8.
Elaine Cantrell
He’s so sweet! I like this.
Summer Ross
Great snippet. I love the voice and way you worded his thoughts. The only thing you might consider is changing ‘sweetly’ to ‘sweet’ I think it comes off a great deal stronger. But try it out for yourself and see if you like it.
Thank you for sharing I really enjoyed the read.
~Summer
My 8 sentences
Debbie
Seems like there’s a possibility they might still get together. I like the prospect!
Siobhan Muir
Oh, I like the reunion type stories. Great snippet, Karla. 🙂
C. Amrhein (@HistorySleuth1)
That was an effective transition into a memory. I’ve liked this kind of secret life time love story ever since I saw When Harry Met Sally. Excellent snippet.
Sarah Ballance
Oh, man. This is sweet and powerful and I love it!