Sunday Snippet – WIP – Sam’s Book
It’s Sunday Snippet time, part of the Weekend Writing Warriors meme. Thanks for stopping here, and make sure you click that pic to see the full list of this week’s participating writers.
This week, I’m posting from one of my WIPs. I’ve been bouncing around between a few of them this summer, and this week I’m back to working on Sam & Leigh’s story. Sam is the hero’s best buddy in BODY OF WORK, a 28-year-old personal trainer at his friend’s brand-new gym. Leigh is a 42-year-old former client from his previous workplace.
In this snippet from the opening pages, they’ve bumped into each other in a downtown coffee shop. It’s been a couple months since Sam changed jobs and they haven’t seen each other since. Leigh has succumbed to his charm and joined him at a table. (The first line of dialogue is hers, and this excerpt is in her POV.)
“Are you trying to lure me away from Iron Works to Focus Fitness…is that ethical?”
Strong yet gentle fingers removed one of her hands from its death-grip on the cup and pulled it toward him, halfway across the table. He pressed a card to her palm. Continued holding her hand, stroking his thumb over her skin while smiling. “If it works, I don’t give a shit about ethics.”
“Anything to snag a client?” Oh god, her voice — hopefully he’d missed the breathy quality so evident to her ears, simply from his hand touching hers.
“I don’t need another client, Leigh.”
And that’s it for now. (Remember, that’s an unpolished snippet up there!) I’m enjoying spending more time with Sam (the charmer, who wouldn’t?), and Leigh is turning out to be a really strong heroine. She’s going to have to be… I have some twists in store for these two. 😉
16 Comments
Cara Bristol
Ooh, ooh, does this mean you’re writing another cougar story?
karladoyle
Sure does. 🙂
Elaine Cantrell
Nice 8. She’s so flustered.
Millie Burns
That smooth personal trainer…the third paragraph confused me a bit at first…couldn’t tell who was thinking, but that’s probably cause I haven’t had my coffee yet, and when I reread it finally made sense. N
karladoyle
Perhaps I should have noted that this snippet is in Leigh’s POV. I’ll correct that now. 🙂
Cindy Amrhein ( @historysleuth1 )
I could feel the sparks flying between these two through the computer screen. Great 8 right there.
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Lila Shaw
Me likey a 42 yr old heroine and especially Sam’s last line there. 🙂
S. J. Maylee
I totally get how both of these characters are feeling. Fabulous. He sure does have a great last line. 🙂
Veronica Scott
Oh yes, a lot of nice intriguing tension going on here. Excellent excerpt, makes me want to keep reading for sure!
Eleri Stone
Oh, wow. That is SUCH a sexy exchange. Love it!
Jess Schira
Wow, I love the second paragraph. Great choreography!
A.S. Fenichel
*sigh* I love these two. All that tension. Great snippet!
Caitlin
Definitely some heat going on under that flirting! What will he do if he can lure her away? 😉
Anastasia Vitsky
Oh, this is great! Such a smooth, seductive way to pull us into the story.
Siobhan Muir
Very very nice, Karla! I like that she’s happy to follow him and yeah, Iron Works doesn’t need the clientele. 😀 Great snippet, even unedited. I’ll be reading that one when it comes out. Go Sam! 😀
Chris Kelworth
Nice snippet, thanks for sharing. Leigh may be old enough to be a cougar, but cougars are also usually the ones chasing younger men, and it looks to me like Sam is the one pursuing here!
I wonder what a personal trainer’s code of ethics would be like. I imagined that as the law of the jungle, with every gym trying to steal clients from the others as an everyday thing.